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2018年7月28日

雅思大作文題目

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Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later, and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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解析&審題

青少年犯罪是全球性的話題，大家都在思考：為什麼青少年會犯罪？為什麼青少年犯罪逐年增加？青少年犯罪後到底該如何懲罰？這些話題也都是雅思考試中的熱門話題。

唐老師總結了一下近幾年雅思作文中關於犯罪的話題，列舉如下：

Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? （2015/4/25；2015/6/18; 2013/11/9）青少年犯罪是否該受到與成年人一樣的懲罰？

Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree?(2015/8/8) 請改造過後的犯人給學生講犯罪的危害，可否？

People are afraid to leave their homes for fear of crimes. Some people believe that more action should be taken to prevent crimes while others think that little could be done. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

(2015/8/29; 2012/11/3) 我們已經沒有辦法阻止犯罪嗎？

Children are committing more crimes. What are the causes? How to punish them?

(2014/8/2; 2010/8/5) 兒童犯罪增多的原因，怎樣處罰他們？

Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

(2014/11/8) 犯罪的原因到底是社會原因還是人性原因？

In most countries,prison is an effective solution to the problem of crime. Some people think it is a more effective solution to provide education for those who violate the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

(2012/5/12；2018/3/3) 還有比監獄更好的辦法來解決犯罪問題嗎？

A recent newspaper article report that a 14 years old boy who seriously destroyed his school got a punishment to clean streets instead of being sent to the prison, Do you think this is right, or the young criminals should be sent to the jail?

(2016/1/14) 青少年損壞公物後被罰掃街，這種處罰合適嗎？

回到今天的考題，這個題目是2015年8月8日的原題重現。題目類型是「你是否同意辦法A是解決B問題的最佳途徑？」，類似的題目很多，比如：「提高車價是解決交通問題的最好辦法嗎？」

對於這類問題，我們一般做法都是先承認辦法的可取之處，然後提出其存在的問題，甚至提出其他更好的辦法。Ok，請改造好的犯人回來給青少年講犯罪的危險，這個肯定是個好辦法，因為這些犯人有親身經歷，現身說法，自然最有說服力，也講得更為形象，而且經過改造，他們對犯罪可能造成的危害也理解得更加深刻。但是（這類題目一定要論述「但是」這個部分！），從另外一個方面講，這些犯人雖然已經改造好了，但畢竟曾經是犯人，對於尚不能完全分辨是非的青少年（teenagers）來說（注意，teenagers是本題另外一個關鍵詞），可能會產生非常不好的感覺，比如青少年可能會歧視這些人，從而讓其宣講的效果大打折扣。給青少年普及犯罪的危害還有其他辦法：閱讀書籍、觀看電影、參觀犯罪博物館，等等。

以下是唐老師撰寫的7分範文。

老師筆記

01

One important part of teenagers』 education is turning them into law-abiding citizens by making them realise the dangers of committing crimes. The best way to do this, as many people would argue, is to have ex-prisoners, who have now become good citizens, talking to teenagers about their personal stories. While I think it may indeed be effective, it may also fail sometimes.

青少年教育的一個重要部分是讓他們認識到犯罪的危險，從而成為守法的公民。在許多人看來，最好的方法就是讓現在已經成為好公民的前囚犯來與青少年談論他們的個人故事。雖然我認為它可能確實有效，但有時候也可能沒有作用。

解析

(1) 本段從青少年的教育入題，然後重述題目觀點，最後給出自己的觀點。

(2) law-abiding 遵紀守法的

(3) personal stories 個人故事；個人經歷

02

Obviously, ex-prisoners are in a better position than anybody else to let teenagers understand the consequences of violating the law. They were personallyinvolved in crimes and know very well how much pain their behavior has inflicted upon the victims and their families. They also know very well how hard their life in prison was and what freedom really means. Compared with the lectures given by the law teachers, the personal stories shared by ex-prisoners are more direct, more powerful emotionally, and thus more effective as an educational tool.

顯然，前囚犯比任何人都更能讓青少年了解違法的後果。他們親身參與了犯罪，非常清楚他們的行為給受害者及其家人帶來的痛苦。他們也非常清楚他們在監獄裡的生活有多艱難，自由到底意味著什麼。與法律老師的講課相比，前囚犯分享的個人故事更直接，情感上更有力度，因此是更有效的教育工具。

解析

(1) 本段分析前囚犯講述個人經歷可能有效的原因，本段使用了比較法。

(2) in a position to do... 能夠做......

(3) violate the law 違法

(4) be involved in... 捲入......

(5) inflict pain on/upon... 給......帶來痛苦

03

Nevertheless, having a former prisoner standing face to face with a group of teenagers may be an awkwardscenario in some cases. It is common for people, especially youngsters, to have a fear towards criminals, particularly those who have committed violent crimes. Very naturally, teenagers may develop a strongdistrust of the former criminals and so they will not listen to their stories, however interesting these stories might be. That is why many schools would have policemen, instead of former prisoners, giving law lessons to their students, because to teenagers, policemen are much more trustworthy.

然而，在某些情況下，讓一名前囚犯與一群青少年面對面可能是一種尷尬的情景。人們，特別是年輕人，對罪犯（特別是那些曾犯下暴力罪行的罪犯）感到恐懼是很常見的。很自然，青少年可能會對以前的罪犯產生強烈的不信任，所以他們不會聽他們講故事，無論這些故事多麼有趣。這就是為什麼許多學校會請警察，而不是以前的囚犯，來給他們的學生上法律課，因為對青少年來說，警察要值得信賴得多。

解析

(1) 本段論述讓前囚犯來講個人經歷為什麼有時候沒有作用。

(2) scenario 場景

(3) distrust 不信任

(4) trustworthy 值得信賴的

04

In conclusion, teenagers』 ability to tell right from wrong is important to themselves as well as the entire society. By listening to the personal stories of former prisoners, youngsters may be touched and become more conscious of the consequences of committing crimes, yetalternative measures should be found when this does notwork out.

總之，青少年辨別是非的能力對他們自己和整個社會都很重要。通過聽前囚犯的個人故事，青少年可能會被感動，從而更多地意識到犯罪的後果，但是，當這種做法行不通時，就應該找到其他的措施。

解析

(1) 本段是結論。

(2) be conscious of... 意識到......；明白......

(3) alternative 替換的；其他的

(4) work out 行得通；可行

本範文中可背誦的句子

1. One important part of teenagers』 education is turning them into law-abiding citizens by making them realise the dangers of committing crimes.

青少年教育的一個重要部分是讓他們認識到犯罪的危險，從而成為守法的公民。

2. Compared with the lectures given by the law teachers, the personal stories shared by ex-prisoners are more direct, more powerful emotionally, and thus more effective as an educational tool.

與法律老師的講課相比，前囚犯分享的個人故事更直接，情感上更有力度，因此是更有效的教育工具。

3. Very naturally, teenagers may develop a strongdistrust of the former criminals and so they will not listen to their stories, however interesting these stories might be.

很自然，青少年可能會對以前的罪犯產生強烈的不信任，所以他們不會聽他們講故事，無論這些故事多麼有趣。

4. By listening to the personal stories of former prisoners, youngsters may be touched and become more conscious of the consequences of committing crimes, yet alternative measures should be found when this does not work out.

通過聽前囚犯的個人故事，青少年可能會被感動，從而更多地意識到犯罪的後果，但是，當這種做法行不通時，就應該找到其他的措施。

向上滑動閱覽

7分範文

One important part of teenagers』 education is turning them into law-abiding citizens by making them realise the dangers of committing crimes. The best way to do this, as many people would argue, is to have ex-prisoners, who have now become good citizens, talking to teenagers about their personal stories. While I think it may indeed be effective, it may also fail sometimes.

Obviously, ex-prisoners are in a better position than anybody else to let teenagers understand the consequences of violating the law. They were personally involved in crimes and know very well how much pain their behavior has inflicted upon the victims and their families. They also know very well how hard their life in prison was and what freedom really means. Compared with the lectures given by the law teachers, the personal stories shared by ex-prisoners are more direct, more powerful emotionally, and thus more effective as an educational tool.

Nevertheless, having a former prisoner standing face to face with a group of teenagers may be an awkward scenario in some cases. It is common for people, especially youngsters, to have a fear towards criminals, particularly those who have committed violent crimes. Very naturally, teenagers may develop a strong distrust of the former criminals and so they will not listen to their stories, however interesting these stories might be. That is why many schools would have policemen, instead of former prisoners, giving law lessons to their students, because to teenagers, policemen are much more trustworthy.

In conclusion, teenagers』 ability to tell right from wrong is important to themselves as well as the entire society. By listening to the personal stories of former prisoners, youngsters may be touched and become more conscious of the consequences of committing crimes, yet alternative measures should be found when this does not work out.

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