3月3日考題-雅思9分老師範文

借用英國朋友的一句話

"The gaps between English and Chinese in terms of language, culture, and teaching methodology are large."

英語和漢語，在語言、文化和教學法方面差異巨大。

這個系列的文章旨在告訴考鴨

英國考官預期的（優秀）雅思寫作答案，可能本身就在考鴨的認知範圍之外。

2018年3月3日雅思寫作考題

In most countries, prison is the most common solution for the problem of crime. However, the more effective solution is to provide people with better education so that they do not become criminals.

To what extent do you agree or disagree.

邵教授的解析

很多中國考鴨的立場是這樣的

better education 和 prison 都好都有用，因此一樣有效

一團和氣，不得罪任何人那考官就要得罪你了

以上的立場，根本就不是一個明確的立場。

此外，A和B都有效，不代表它們一樣有效。

一樣有效，是考鴨愛走的捷徑。這樣確實可以減少很多思考。

我們來想想如何處理

首先，讓考鴨們無法釋懷的一點prison 和 better education 都是有效的其次，再問問你的心，到底哪個更有效？多數人會覺得是 better education 吧

參考思路

長遠看來，better education 更有效；但是針對一些 better education 無法改善的人，仍然需要 prison. 即prison 是 better education 的補充

主體段的展開：

1. 為什麼 better education 更有效

2. better education 無法改善的人是誰

雅思9分英國老師的範文

開頭段

Opinions differ on the extent to which incarceration deals effectively with crime as opposed to improving the quality of education. My view is that there will always be a role for prisons in confining evil people, but better education is more likely to reduce crime levels.

必須有黑體部分的信息，才算回答問題。

主體段1：討論 prison 的作用

Confining criminals to prison is likely to always be necessary at least to some extent. There are currently a large number of people in jail for serious offences like murder and, for them, preventive education would come too late. It is more important that society continue to be protected from them than to release them in the hope that they might reform by virtue of educational programmes. Another reality is the fact that some people choose to commit serious wrongdoings no matter how much education they have received. This is the case for many white-collar crimes such as fraud which often involve the elaborate schemes that only very intelligent people could devise.

黑體部分為主題句，告訴讀者這一段你要寫什麼。

1) 犯了謀殺罪等重罪的大量囚犯，靠防止犯罪的教育來改變他們，已經太遲了。保護人們不受他們的傷害，比釋放他們並指望通過教育來改造他們，更重要。

2) 有些人無論接受了多少教育，都會選擇犯罪。很多白領犯罪，比如詐騙，就是需要高智商的人才能設計出來的。

主體段2：討論 better education 的作用

Nevertheless, improvements to education would, in my view, be a better means of reducing the number of people who want to commit crime in the long-term. Acquiring more useful knowledge especially when young would provide greater opportunities for entry into satisfying careers. Further education opens up new possibilities in terms of developing healthy interests and participating in worthwhile activities such as sports and hobbies. Better education would achieve improved outcomes such as a proficiency in a sport rather than just a passing interest. The more people achieve personal goals in terms of their careers or hobbies, the more people will find meaning in life and thus not be tempted to use their talents in illegal ways.

1) 獲取更多有用的知識，尤其在年輕的時候，會給人帶去更大的機會，進入體面的職業。

2) 中學後的深造，為人們培養健康的興趣和參加有意義的活動，提供了新的可能性。

3) 更好的教育能帶來更好的結果，比如對某項運動轉瞬即逝的興趣變成了熟練。

越多的人在職業和愛好方面達到了目標，就有越多的人找到生命的意義，因此不會被誘惑將自己的才華運用到違法的事情上。

結尾段

In conclusion, I acknowledge the place that imprisonment will have in protecting society from serious offenders who have already committed crimes. However crime levels are more likely to fall more drastically over the longer term by reason of improvement to education.

黑體部分，再次給出觀點，這才叫做觀點

英國老師考了雅思總分9，不代表每一篇作文都是9分。他自己也承認，這個題目很難寫，他在答題的時候也遇到了很多問題。