一步一步搞定雅思寫作（68）之犯罪類

04-14

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In many countries, prison is the common solution to the problem of crime. However, a more effective way is to provide people with better education so that they will not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

這個犯罪類的題目倒是不那麼難，支持prison的理由是：

震懾犯罪，畢竟有了犯罪記錄，想再融入社會還挺難的。

支持教育更有用：

教育讓人能找到工作，有了穩定的收入，一般也不回去犯罪
教育提高人的道德意識，也能減少一些犯罪

正文部分：

When it comes to how to reduce crime, some people argue that education is more effective than imprisonment, and I also agree with this opinion.

Admittedly, prison has a deterring effect on lawbreakers. If people commit some severe crimes, such as stealing a large amount of money, they will be sentenced to prison where they are isolated from society. When they are released, their crime records will make it more difficult for them to secure employment, so some criminals may choose not to break the law considering the consequence of imprisonment. However, admitting the function of prison is not assuming that it is more effective than education.

To begin with, education can help individuals get a stable life. It is acknowledged that many adults perpetrate crimes because they cannot make a living. If they can receive education from an early age, their knowledge can help them find decent jobs with a higher possibility. Then, they can save some money and gradually improve their quality of life, under which condition they may not be likely to break the law.

In addition, people may have a stronger sense of morality after being educated. Some criminals only focus on their own benefits so that they probably choose to make money by fraud. If those criminals can receive education and learn how some famous businessmen succeed, they can realize that morality is crucial for one to live or work in society; without reputation, one cannot be recognized by others, and it is difficult for a liar to build a team to succeed. Therefore, education is effective to reduce crime because it can enlighten people on how necessary morality is in the current era.

To sum up, compared to prison, education can more effectively cut crime, considering that education offers citizens salaries to live a quiet life, and individuals can know the importance of morality.

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