一篇8分雅思大作文的範文詳解

再過兩天就是考試的日子了,你準備的怎麼樣了。

無論你準備到什麼樣的程度,我接下去要講的東西,都會對你有幫助。

我特地找了一篇老外的八分雅思大作文,為大家詳解作者的寫作思路。

相信你會從中學到不少經驗。

八分雅思作文真的有很複雜嗎

我們先來看一下題目:

When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

記得讀題要讀幾遍嗎?

至少三遍。為什麼?

第一遍讀大概。(知道題目大概說什麼)

第二遍讀類型。(題目要我們回答什麼,別說不知道雅思作文有幾類哈)

第三遍讀細節。(找到題目中背景、觀點、關鍵詞)

按照我說的讀三遍,你先自己實踐一下,看看能不能找到題目中的要素。

首先我們找到題目問的是:what extent do you agree or disagree.

大腦要開始思考了哈。。。

100% agree, 100% disagree, partly agree。

三個方向,分別需要三類不同的寫作結構。暫時先不詳細考慮,接著讀.

題目的背景:很明顯是第一句話,隨著城市的科技不斷發展,傳統技能和生活方式也消失了。

題目的觀點:嘗試或努力保持它們存活下來,是沒有任何意義的。

(它們指的就是傳統技能和生活方式)

再讀第三遍:

找到幾個重要的關鍵詞:country technology, traditional skill, ways of life, pointless, alive.

無論你能寫出多高的雅思作文,這一步都是必不可少的。

頭盤結束,正餐上桌

有了這些題目的信息之後,假如是你,你會想到什麼觀點呢?

比如哪些傳統技能或生活方式還依然被保留呢

或者哪些傳統技能或生活方式已經消失了

帶著問題,我們來讀範文。首先是開頭:

Nowadays, technological advances and their rapid and wide applications are having a significant impact on a nation"s traditional skills and ways of life. Some argue that such impact is so extraordinary that it would make conventional skills and life styles obsolete. However, I believe they would continue to thrive by providing alternatives to modern ways of life, and innovative ideas for modern technologies.

第一句話,也是我鼓勵大家去學習作者的寫作手法。

直接重述題目中的背景介紹,並使用更豐滿的語言

讓讀者第一眼就知道文章在什麼背景下進行。

第二句話,闡述了題目的觀點。

第三句,however開頭,預示著下面將出現作者的觀點。

(這一種寫作方法,也很好的回答了一些同學問到:what extent do you agree or disagree到底要不要在開頭,明確自己的觀點)

再來看正文第一段

First of all, traditional skills and ways of life are becoming an alternative solution to the problems caused by 「mainstreamed」 ways of life which are greatly influenced by modern technologies. For instance, a cozy restaurant where traditional, home-brewed beer is served, offers another experience to people who are bored with branded beers that have the same flavor and come out of mass production with new technologies. It is in such a venue where traditional skills are preserved, people become relaxed and educated. Providing diversity and thus enriching modern ways of life, such traditional skills and ways of life would continue to have their place.

第一句,作者直白的給出了自己的觀點。

(他認為傳統技能和生活方式,正在成為一種替代的解決方案,用來解決那些被科技所影響的主流生活方式所帶來的問題)

第二句,給出例子,介紹他所能想到的,可以完全解釋觀點的例子。

第三句,一句話總結例子,「因為傳統被保留,所以這裡成為了讓人們放鬆和學習的地方」

第四句,總結整段,重申觀點:「只要現代生活方式有多樣性的需求,那麼傳統技能和生活方式依然有其存在的價值」

前三句結構是,觀點+例子+總結(與平時的觀點+解釋+例子不同),但是卻符合邏輯的,請你想想為什麼...

再來看正文第二段

Furthermore, conventional skills provide innovative ideas to the development of modern technologies. For example, sparkled by how the word 「Love」 is traditionally knitted into a sweater by some ethnic minority women in some parts of Asia, some business managers from textile industry have developed some production lines by applying the traditional skills to Computer-Aided Designs (CAD). The products have boosted the companies』 sales which in turn have increased their investment in preserving traditional skills for further developing their technologies.

這一段的分析工作,就留給你去完成了

希望你能從中找出能讓你靈光一現的亮點。

最後一段結尾

To conclude, traditional skills and life styles are increasingly becoming a useful alternative to the homogeneity brought by global applications of modern technologies. However, the evolution of technologies is a selection process, whereby some would become obsolete, but there is no doubt that some would thrive when their roles are appreciated.

第一句中,homogeneity是一個值得記住的詞語。同質化。

傳統的生活方式,在科技發達的今天,就是對現代方式的彌補和豐富。

第二句,有一個讓步的過程,先承認科技發展是一個選擇性的過程,

承認有些傳統一定會被淘汰,然後在強調自己的觀點。

強烈建議你多讀幾遍作者是如何表達自己的觀點,希望你可以忘記過去自己枯燥乏味的陳述方式,他山之石可以攻玉.

總結

學習範文,是我們提高寫作實力的方法之一。

所要模仿和借鑒的,是作者的思路和某些有用的表達方式。

當你發現有些句子不理解時,停下來多想一想,找點衍生的資料去學習,

可以更好的幫助你記住它,理解它。

範文的學習方法並不是固定的,10個人看同一篇範文,可能有十種不同觀點。

希望你學完後,可以形成自己的認識和理解。這樣才是有效的學習。

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