關於雅思寫作?

01-15

有沒有小夥伴上過顧家北的課？有人說他講話很慢聽不懂，但是大家說他的課很好，有沒有人能介紹下？另外，某寶上賣的和真實上課感覺一樣嗎？

作為一個理性的雅思考試分析者來看，雅思的總分過6.5分，甚至7分並不難，而難點就在於，在同一場考試中，四門同時過6分，更不用說同時過7分了。（各位是不是都吃過虧）；

那麼如何在同一場考試中，保持穩定的同時的考過四個6分（或者四個7分呢？）seems to be more of a real challenge ! 其中最關鍵的就是寫作和口語同時考過，本回答主要來討論一下寫作的提分問題。

這個問題要分為2個層次來回答：

一， 6分以內提高到6分：

要解決三大問題：

STEP ONE:語法問題：

這
里推薦100句常見語法和20組中國考生最常見的語法修改示範，其實一位同學犯的語法錯誤，總是那幾個，比如介詞沒搞懂，那麼介詞就是你永遠跨越不了的
坎；如果動詞時態沒搞清楚，那麼寫書信，寫大作文的例子的時候就特別容易出錯；還有,雙謂語甚至無動詞；無主語句子；時態的亂用
；動詞搭配問題,6複合句的亂用；副詞的使用；倒裝句的亂用；後置狀語和前置狀語；主謂不一致等等，常見的錯誤也就這麼多；多加提防；

這裡列舉了前三組帶有解析的語法分析：

第一組：介詞短語後面不接動詞原形以及完整的句子

1, Talking too much but doing too few gives rise to make others a
terrible impression.

正確形式：Talking too much but doing too few
gives rise to a terrible impression.

錯誤解析：因為give rise to 是介詞短語，後面是不能接動詞的，所以必須要修改為名詞形式，直接去掉make
others.

2, This above phenomenon can be explained by we change our attitudes
towards the lifestyles and by we lose interests on local history of indigenous
people.

正確形式：This above phenomenon can be explained
by changing attitudes towards the lifestyles and by losing interests on local
history of indigenous people.

錯誤解析：因為by 是介詞短語，後面是不能接動詞的，所以必須要修改為名詞形式或者動名詞形式，直接將change
和lose 改為changing 和losing.

3, When it comes to ask the questions about the clear definitions of
education and career success. People always hold divergent viewpoints.

正確形式：When it comes to the clear
definitions of education and career success, people always hold divergent
viewpoints.

錯誤解析：因為when it comes to是介詞短語，後面是不能接動詞的，所以必須要修改為名詞形式或者動名詞形式，直接去掉ask
the questions，是多餘的成分。另外when 引導的只是一個從句，後面需要真正的主句進行支撐，所以要把people小寫。

4, I still fail to pass the IELTS despite I have already collected
pencils with 9 kinds of colors.

正確形式：I still fail to pass the IELTS
despite pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

錯誤解析：因為despite是介詞短語，後面是不能接動詞或者句子的，可以將其修改為名詞形式或者動名詞形式，將句子：I
have already collected pencils with 9 kinds of colors. 調整為：pencils with 9 kinds of colors I have collected together.

5， Many fans are crazy about love affairs of Hanhan， a well-known Chinese writer, despite
they know that he is a playboy.

正確形式：Many fans are crazy about love
affairs of Hanhan，a well-known Chinese writer, despite that they know that he is
sometimes a playboy.

錯誤解析：因為despite是介詞短語，後面是不能接動詞或者句子的，除了可以將句子修改為名詞形式或者動名詞形式，也可以將despite 修改為：despite that . 另外韓寒並不是總是playboy,所以加上sometimes.

6, Many
students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite they have understood
the negatives of illhealth effects.

正確形式: Many students refuse to give up unhealthy lifestyles despite the
negatives of illhealth effects.

錯誤解析：介詞不是連詞，一般後面只接名詞或者具備名詞性質的短語或者帶連詞的賓語從句，因此不能加句子。常見錯誤有：」despite,in spite of , during, because of , due to」, 也不能後接動詞。

7, Many poor
citizens always depend on the rich give support.

正確形式: Many poor citizens always depend on supports of the rich.

錯誤解析：介詞不是連詞，一般後面只接名詞或者具備名詞性質的短語或者帶連詞的賓語從句。不能接動詞或者句子。

8, Life
disorder can lead to damage an individual』s health.

正確形式:
Life disorder can lead to health recession of an individual.

錯誤解析：「to」在某些情況下，（如片語「giverise to , contribute to , pay attention to , conform to , lead
to」)都是介詞短語+名詞或者動名詞。

9, Nobody
could deny the importance of environment protection , for the simple reason is
that it is of far-reaching significance in the future .

正確形式: Nobody could deny the importance of environment protection, for
its far-reaching significance in the future.

錯誤解析：特殊的介詞，如：」for， since, after, before」在大部分時候都是介詞，不接完整的句子。

10, Individuals
have different attitudes for the definition of happiness.

正確形式：Individuals have different attitudes the definition of happiness.

錯誤解析：介詞後面不能再接介詞。注意一些比較特殊的介詞如：attitudes。

介詞短語加了句號錯誤表達： With the society develops. people begin to realize the
importance of biological balance.

正確形式：With
the development of society, people begin to realize the importance of
biological balance.（介詞短語不是句子，不能加句號）

第二組一句話不能有2個動詞，也不能沒有謂語動詞。

11，It is advertising makes customers buysomething impulsively.

正確形式：It is advertising that makes
customers buy something impulsively.

錯誤解析：因為 is 和makes 都是動詞，所以該句話有2個動詞，需要去掉一個動詞，本句中可以把makes 前面增加that,這樣後面就是定於從句了。
從而該句就只有一個動詞。

12，There is a research shows thatmany parents are depend on teachers
give support.

正確形式：There is a research showing that many
parents are depending on teachers who give support.

錯誤解析：本句的錯誤太多，主要是謂語動詞太多，要記住一個主句只能有一個位於動詞，而一個從句也只能有一個謂語動詞。而主句中的is和show就是多一個重複了，而從句中：are ,depend, give都是動詞，而只能有一個動詞。

13，ere was a famous Chinesebook describe a monkey , a pig , a sand monk
and a true monk go to west forpilgrimage.

,確形式：There was a famous Chinese book describing a monkey , a pig , a sand
monk and a true monk go to west for pilgrimage.

錯誤解析：要記住一個主句只能有一個謂語動詞，而一個從句也只能有一個謂語動詞。而主句中的was 和describe就是多一個重複了，需要將describe 修改為：describing 作為後置定語。

14，e number of the populationwas decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure
of population was increased inthe years of 1996 and 2000, the data was then
continue increase in the last 5years.

正確形式：The number of the population
decreased in the 1990 to 1995, the figure of population increased in the years
of 1996 and 2000, and the data was then continuously increasing in the last
5years.

錯誤解析：要記住一個主句只能有一個謂語動詞，而該句中的謂語動詞太多，
所以需要去掉was
並且將最後一個分句中的was
then continue increase 中的continue改成副詞continuously, decrease 改成was decreasing.

15，I earned the money is the least.

正確形式：I earned the least money.或者my income was the least.

16， was
a wolf come from Nanjing.

正確形式：I was a wolf coming from Nanjing.

17，ow there are always many new things come out every day.

正確形式：Now there are
always many new things coming out every day.

18，
謂語動詞：

錯誤表達:There
have many people believe that mobile phones are useful.

正確表達：There
are many people who believe that mobile phones are useful.

錯誤解析：（不存在There have的形式，而且There be結構後不能再加謂語動詞。）

第三組：逗號不能夠連接2個完整的句子

19，There are plenty ofuniversities in China , most of that are not good
enough.

正確形式：There are plenty of universities in
China , most of which are not good enough. There are plenty of universities in
China and most of that are not good enough. / There are plenty of universities
in China; most of that are not good enough. /There are plenty of universities
in China .Most of which are not good enough.

錯誤解析：逗號不能連接2個完整的句子。所以需要將其中一個句子變成從句，或者使用分號或者句號來代替逗號。

20，cry , you cry.

正確形式：I cry; you cry. / I cry and you cry.
/ I cry. You cry.

21, We all tried our best,however, we lost the game.

正確形式：We all tried our best. However, we
lost the game./ We all tried our best; however, we lost the game.

錯誤解析：即使是however,也不能連接前後都是完整的句子，因為however是副詞，只有and 和but 這2個連接詞才可以連接2個完整的句子。

22 China has achieved great prosperity ,however ,its culture
suffered a lot.

正確形式：China has achieved great prosperity
.However ,its culture suffered a lot./China has achieved great prosperity;
however,its culture suffered a lot.

錯誤解析：注意這點和單獨的however, 將一個句子的主語和謂語動詞隔開的句子有本質的區別。比如：students,
however, always expect their high praise from parents and teachers. 該句中是一個句子，所以可以用however 將主語和謂語分開。

23，They always feel boring about visiting some places where they are no fresh and no extremely attractive
talking points， therefore, local museums and historical sites cannot be drawn
into much discussion as they are without cartoons, movie stars and sports.

正確形式：They always feel boring about
visiting some places where they are no fresh and no extremely attractive
talking points.Therefore, local museums and historical sites cannot be drawn
into much discussion as they are without cartoons, movie stars and sports.

錯誤解析：注意 therefore, on the other hand, on the contrary 這些類似的片語或者副詞都是副詞成分，並不能連接前後都是完整的句子。所以需要修改為：
將逗號改為句號或者分號。

24, Student s are always tired of sitting in the classroom
for a whole morning, thus show their resentment
with the current teaching method.

正確形式：Student s are
always tired of sitting in the classroom for a whole morning, and thus show
their resentment with the current teaching method.

錯誤解析：thus 照樣是插入語，是副詞成分，不是連接詞，所以不能連接前後都是完整的句子。

2， STEP TWO:

當語法沒有問題的時候，（260字的大作文+小作文150字）總共語法錯誤不超過5個，這個要求不高吧？一般是要麼錯一大片，要麼就懂了，然後就好很多。

然後就是要解決另外一個很核心的問題，就是細化思維的問題；

通過細化思維來將題目進行有邏輯的流暢展開，並且的確是展開話題用的，是寫作得分的關鍵。

當考官看到類似，萬能開頭：With the development of...的時候，想必一定會皺眉頭。
「也許只有中國人會用吧。那為什麼像類似的開篇：with the development
of society and economy, there are more and more//increasing number of //，
the topic is a hotly-debated one, which arose our passion
towards the…, 然後再寫一波大的背景，然後開始寫作文切入的話題，這種思路嚴重破壞了雅思作文的評分標準（CC）連貫性的問題。所以作文的開篇就必須要是直接切入話題（通過細化思維的描述，然後表明自己的觀點即可。）

中
文追求高語境文化容易宏觀化一些概念，也就是很大很空的話，類似於「新聞聯播」的發言稿。高中的作文的時候，寫的越大，不接地氣，越雲里霧裡的文章，越能
拿高分。這些華麗的軀殼並沒有嚴謹的邏輯。所以細化思維的訓練是非常重要的訓練，這個也可以從很多劍橋雅思後面的範文中可以看到。

所
以英文寫作一定要細，要寫清楚。有多細呢？我舉個例子。比如一篇金錢和幸福的關係，優秀的英文邏輯就是：「有了錢我可以買車，有了車生活會更方便，生活方
便了我的幸福指數就會提高。」無懈可擊的邏輯，perfect！然而中國人有可能會這樣寫："Being rich could
boost one"s materialistic happiness. Moreover, it
could..."語法單詞基本都沒問題，但是寫了等於沒寫。。。什麼是materialistic
happiness？我們都知道中文是物質幸福，看似也很高大上。然而西方人的人腦迴路是無法直接get到的。。你必須要clarify
it。這些所謂很好並且很複雜的想法並不足以說清楚這些觀點。所以大家要記得要將自己的理性和智商同步下降，這樣才能達到英國人的水平和高度。

舉例說明如下：

細化思維的訓練中文擅長把一個抽象的問題變得更抽象，以大見更大；英文擅長把一個抽象的問題變得具體化

例子一： Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of
advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To
what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include
any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

4.5分的思維： Nowdays (竟然有人少寫了個 a) ,with society develops,
advertisements plays a more and more important role in modern society.

5.5分的思維： Nowadays, with the development of society and economy, advertisements
play a more and more important role in modern society. Some people said they
are helpful to give us much information while others do not think so. From my
perspective, I think ….

6.5分的思維： Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the
streets. While someone doubt the usefulness and value of advertisements, I
still believe it is a positive trend with overt benefits.

7.5分的思維： Nowadays, there are lots of advertisements on television or on the
billboards. Some people think that the advertising boosts the sales of goods
and it encourages people to buy things unnecessarily. These arguments may be
true. In my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous
and popular actors or singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that
their favorite singer advertise, although they do not really need the products.

8.5分的思維： Nowadays, no matter where you get around in a city or even in the
countryside, it is pretty easy for you to find one or two billboards
introducing products in the streets. Some people think that advertising boosts
the sales of goods and encourages people to buy things they do not necessarily
need. This argument contains some truth. In my country, advertising companies
often produce advertisements featuring popular actors or singers to induce
people, especially youngsters, to acquire goods which their favorite actor or
singer seems to endorse, whether they need the products or not..

細化訓練（例子二） In
some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between
finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages
and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

4.5---5 分的思維

It is a
well-acknowledged that studying is not easy. Along with many benefits also
comes negative aspects. We should look
at both side before reaching a conclusion about wether working a year bring
more benefits or more problems.

5.5—6分的思維

Nowadays,
the ways to educate the youth become increasingly significant in such a
competitive society. The opinion that teenagers could have a year free from
school for traveling and work arouse a heated debate. Although there are both
pros and cons for the question, ,my view is that teenagers who are 10 something
to 20 something could have their own choice to decide where to learn and how to
learn.

6分的思維

It is hard for young
people to make the decision on whether they should work or travel before
starting university studies. Some consider it is an excellent chance for them
to practice themselves while others believe that it will produce adverse
effects on their life.

6.5-7分的思維

Thanks
to the gap year, nowadays high school graduates can be highly praised by their
strong abilities. While many young people are in favor of the attempt, older
generation tends to hold conservative attitudes. Personally, I believe
different types of media have their respective merits.

It is
quite common these days for young people in many countries to have a break from
studying after graduating from high school. The trend is not restricted to rich
students who have the money to travel, but is also evident among poorer
students who choose to work and become economically independent for a period of
time.

附上一篇關於考官範文的解析：
就是在沒有語法錯誤的前提下，通過細化思維和批判性思維進行寫作的典範；

第一篇：抽象類話題分析：

題目：As
most people spend a major part of their adult life at work， job
satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors
contribute to job satisfaction？How
realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers？

題干分析:本題是相對抽象的社會生活類話題，對於中學生以及沒有上過班的大學生同學們有一定話題上的陌生感。但是即使是上班的「同志們」就一定覺得題目容易展開嗎？是的，中國人的答案在面對這個題目的時候是驚人的相似，可以預見，大家的答案往往是：money, power, promotion。這些對於工作滿意度的factors的回答本身是沒有問題的，但是難點在於不要忽視了去解釋和補充我們「為什麼把這些元素」看的比較重的原因。回答的內容本身並不重要，但重要的是如何解釋清楚。

Nowadays many adults （直接用adults 是細化思維的體現，不要只是寫people, 使句子更貼話題） have full-time jobs
and the proportion of their lives spent doing such jobs is very high. （首句不要寫太長的背景，要從第一句話就開始描述這個話題，而不是「with the development of society and economy ,
there is a hotly-debated topic about whether or not …這樣的套話，是註定讓你丟分的，接下來將變成一個考官驗證5分或者5.5分的過程。那為什麼不能寫模板呢？這樣的句子本身的質量不是很好？威廉老師告訴你，是因為背景寫的太大，緊接著就跳入非常具體的話題，這樣嚴重破壞了作文的CC（連貫性）這一評分標準）。 So feelings about
one』s job must reflect how an individual feels about his or her life as a whole， and
because of this， job
satisfaction is indeed very important for the wellbeing of that person. （順接的很自然）高手應該做到讓段落的內容的話題的範文不要太寬，要盡量剋制寫很多內容的衝動。你有沒有發現，當你從第一句就開始寫這個話題，從寫成年人的工作對於成年人很重要的前提下，自然就過渡到了「工作滿意度「的話題，因為話題窄，所以很容易構成有邏輯）。

Employees get job
satisfaction in a number of ways.（羅列式中心句，就表明接下來會有幾個具體的方面需要具體展開）
Firstly， a person needs to feel that they are
doing valued and valuable work， so
positive feedback from superiors is very important in this respect. A sense of
fulfillment is also（also 體現遞進，內在的邏輯）
encouraged if a worker feels the job is worth doing because it contributes to the
society or the economy as a whole. （先接結果後寫原因是高分作文特徵之一，這樣能有效避免觀點跳躍）Secondly， when
someone feels they are improving or developing their skills through training
opportunities，（很細節，並且符合邏輯的觀點，也許沒有工作經驗的同學不能夠想到） for
example， then there is a sense of progression
and purpose that rewards a worker. The sense of belonging to a team or a
working community also（遞進詞，體現內在的邏輯） contributes to job satisfaction
because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives.（先寫結果，後寫原因是高分作文的特徵之一）Satisfaction is also increased by a
sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team.

該段落使用羅列式中心句，並且細化思維做的很好。在一個段落中就出現了：「valued
and valuable work，positive
feedback from superiors，A
sense of fulfillment，contributes
to the society or the economy，improving
or developing their skills，training
opportunities，a
sense of progression and purpose，sense
of belonging to a team or a working community，colleagues
help each other，a
sense of responsibility for and loyalty to a team 這樣的10個對於factors 的具體回答，並且能夠有效的能將這些細節名詞進行有邏輯的串聯的確是高分的作文的體現）所以觀點本身並不是最關鍵的因素，比如中國人通常所認為的：A reasonable income is quite
an important contributing factor because some basic survival necessities are
highly prices such as housing, cars and dressings and the social welfare system
is not fully accomplished. 只要解釋充分，話題的答案本身就不是最重要的了。）

Of course not everyone enjoys
their work. （直接式的中心句，直接對於第二個問題給予回答） Hard
economic realities mean that many people have little choice in the kind of job
they can get. （進一步解釋）In some cases an employee is working in
a job that suits neither their skills nor their personality. （分類解釋）Some jobs are repetitive and boring，and
labor relations may be poor and lead to resentment and insecurity rather than
to job satisfaction. （進一步的細化思維）

優秀的英文段落結構就像「瀑布「一樣，往細化的方向不斷的展
開，可以採取分組，解釋等方法，先明確的給出」對於問題回答的中心句，即先寫中心句，然後進行進一步展開的倒過來的細化展開的方式，而具有諷刺的是，中國
學生的答案往往在段落的中間就開始不斷的上升話題，從而產生很大的跳躍，習慣於用：which will contribute to
…//Ving 上升主題，最終達到聯繫到了「推動經濟發展，維護社會和諧」的最終主題（ drive the economic
development and maintain social harmony）,殊不知，這樣嚴重破壞了句子和句子之間的邏輯和連貫度。

However， even
though it is unlikely that all workers do feel happy in their work， I
think it is not unrealistic to promote more job satisfaction in any job. （典型的批判性思維的讓步句型，有承上啟下的作用。是8分作文最重要的特徵之一，從而使句子銜接變得特別到位） If
the factors identified above are implemented， then
any job can be improved and more workers can feel greater degrees of job
satisfaction. （批判性思維）。

總體點評：這是篇題目本身非常抽象的題目，經過作者的細化思維的一步步展開，讓我們對於「工作滿意度」這一抽象問題有的較為具體的認識，但更重要的是作者將每一個要展開的分論點都進一步的解釋和分析是得到高分最重要的原因。另外最後一段（even though, it is not
unrealistic 這樣的批判性思維能極大的提高CC連貫度）。

這麼說，首先不在老師，因為講的課都那麼幾節課，某球「七天帶你上7」，某東「頂級名師帶你飛」。其實都是一樣的，顧更學術，所以嚴謹些。但是又不如其他的生動活潑了。

個人感覺中國人寫不好的最大原因就是缺乏邏輯性並不是缺乏辭彙等。所以好好練練AmericanThinking也許更有效。

鄙人也做過某機構的老師，總結如下

1. 豐富辭彙　

詞是語言最基本的成分。如果不掌握一定數量的詞語，雅思寫作就無法寫出好文章。雅思寫作要寫好文章，就必須善於從眾多的詞語中選擇和運用最恰當的詞語。所以擴大和豐富自己的辭彙量是提高雅思寫作能力的基礎。根據我的經驗，我推薦大家集中式背單詞，一本書一個月左右就背誦過一遍來，這樣你就會在閱讀中碰到自己背過的單詞，從而會覺得背的單詞有用，可以激勵自己繼續背下去。然後再背第二遍，爭取把大部分辭彙轉化為寫作辭彙。記住，you will succeed if you persist!　　

2．重視閱讀　　

要有效地提高英語水乎，必須作大量的閱讀。廣泛的閱讀可使學生開拓視野，豐富知識，增加語感，為寫作提供必要的語言材料。作文和閱讀是相輔相成、互相促進的。有些詞語和句型，學生只是似曾相識，通過作文能促使學生把這些東西運用得更熟練，表達得更準確。反過來，這也會有效地提高學生的閱讀理解能力。在廣泛閱讀的基礎上，特別要注意精讀一些內容接近現實生活，接近學生生活實際的文章。這樣的文章對於雅思寫作是很有必要的，可以以此來擴展視野，豐富相關主題的辭彙資源。如有琅琅上口之作，則可拿來背誦。至於一些離現實生活較遠，用詞艱澀，含意深奧的文章，則不必在上面多花時間。　　

傳統的英語老師講解課文，大部分只注重語法和辭彙，而極少分析篇章結構，正是由於這樣的原因，很多學生在自己寫文章的時候，容易忽視謀篇布局，導致寫出來的文章讀一個句子能讀懂，但一段和一篇文章就看不明白了。所以，閱讀中也要對文章結構相應重視，體會和揣摩英文的篇章結構的特點。對考雅思或者是想了解學術類寫作特點的同學來講，多看一下劍2-5的閱讀文章。　　

3．加強背誦　　

一般來說，我不推薦大家去背誦網上一些所謂的高分範文。但是，作為語言學習，背誦是必不可少的。看了好文章，不單是理解就夠了，還應該在理解的基礎上多多背誦，才能達到融會貫通、據為已有的效果。把一些句型、短語，一些文章的片段或全篇，背得滾瓜爛熟，讓這些材料在你的腦袋裡紮根，當你要用的時根，它們使會自然而然地冒出來。背誦可以培養正確使用語言的習慣，增強語感，這樣就可以避免「僵硬直譯」地寫一些中國式的英語。著名的國學大師辜鴻銘精通9種語言，獲得了13個博士學位，學德語之初，就是在不懂的情況下先花了半年的時間稀里糊塗的背誦了一部《浮士德》，才確立了他在德語方面的精深造詣。不過，背誦要注意選擇合適的語言材料，多聽老師的建議。

忘了顧家北的課吧，國內上他的課太多了。國內老師一大特點就是總是教技巧，似乎可以速成。

而作文是唯一不能速成的項目，必須從底層開始訓練，先從語法／辭彙／正面回答問題開始訓練，然後訓練文章觀點的邏輯和說服力，以及文章結構，最後訓練整篇文章連貫性。推薦你多看國外simon老師的文章，用正確的方法去學習他的範文。

simon大神的資料我整理過一份了，你可以好好看看，幫助你節約幾十個小時呢 https://pan.baidu.com/s/1c2BNb0k

另外如何有效地從simon大神的博客里學習，我的專欄會不斷提供新方法，你可以先看幾篇

讀雅思範文，你的眼和心都到了嗎 - 德尼西羅的文章 - 知乎專欄

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我上過顧家北的課，很多次。有正式課，有淘寶課。苦戰雅思這麼多年，如果讓我評價當前雅思屆最靠譜的老師，老顧當之無愧。

老顧的課不慢，你覺得慢是因為你太浮躁了。像老顧一直強調的，你要冷靜下來自己主動思考，不要像聽講座一樣干聽。當你做到這點時，你會發現你跟不上他的速度的。

當初qq群里的人這樣勸我的，我又這樣勸我妹妹，我妹妹說她又這樣勸她同學……

不過，決定你成功的是你自己的努力，思考和練習，不是老師的能力。不要有任何個人崇拜！！！老顧是我目前認為最能引導學生的老師了。

另外,不知道老顧如果能看到這條回答會不會賞我點……這廣告好像打的沒有任何利益，算是為我買了老顧那麼多淘寶課的補償吧！！！

雅思寫作高分是每個考生都想要取得的，但並非易事。相反 5.5 分卻成為中國考生的瓶頸，當然高分有高分的原因，低分也有低分的原因。本次我將在一塊聽聽上分享中國考生萬年5.5的原因，那麼萬年5.5究竟是什麼原因呢？

導致5.5分的原因主要有兩點，一個是表達單一，詞不達意，另一個是辭彙匱乏，作文索然無味。就第二點而言，由於辭彙不足，在寫作文時，往往是在文中不斷重複一個詞，使得作文索然無味。比如「引起」一詞的表達上，有些考生只知道cause,於是不斷使用cause一詞。殊不知，還可以用lead to, trigger, give rise to等詞來替換表達。

雅思劍橋官方範圍是一個很好的資源，當你拿出幾篇範文總結髮現原來考官在一片文章中總是喜歡那麼幾個語法點，甚至通過這個可以判斷出那幾篇文章是一個考官寫的，是不是很神奇，這個我把他叫做考官偏愛的8大語法結構，如果掌握這些結構，我們就可以得心應手的把一個簡單句變成複雜句，同時可以把一個單句寫成多種複雜的同意句，比方說年輕人通過做兼職來賺取一些零用錢： young people do part-time jobs to earn some money, 可以變成 doing part-time jobs enables young people to earn some money, 甚至更多表達同一個意思的複雜句，通過練習這種語法點，然後通過把雅思考官的範文翻譯成中文，然後對著自己的中文文本在自己試著寫一下，同時應用這些考官喜歡的語法點，我的學生有最快通過10天的練習從5分突破到6.5

有些同學可能語法結構不錯，考試的時候寫作有6分，但是想上更高的分數7分，7.5就難上加難，那麼6分的原因是什麼呢？

很多考生的目標是6分，因為很多學校會卡寫作小分，而且大部分學生認為6分作文其實也算是一個比較不錯的分數，但由於申請的學校不同，雅思寫作分數要求自然不同。比方說一些健康學或者法律專業的可能要求7分，如果考生想要取得更高的分數的話不僅要了解導致6分的原因，更要掌握方法，我總結為以下幾個原因，即辭彙不夠、喜歡用難詞大詞、語法不精、邏輯不強、不會使用連詞的正確用法，比方說很多學生認為besides這個詞是一個連詞，然而殊不知，當你查字典的時候會發現並不是，還有寫考生不會扣題、中心句不突出，沒有做到首尾呼應甚至只做單邊論證。在本次一塊聽聽我會教大家如何短期內掌握扣題和收尾呼應的方法，同時就辭彙不夠這一點，考生要多加註意，畢竟辭彙是備考雅思寫作的基礎。不積累一定量的辭彙無以表達所思所想，積累了辭彙而熟悉度不夠也無法在規定時間內有效完成任務，所以我們要養成平時積累的習慣，比方說 BBC news，就是一個很好積累辭彙的方式，在網上隨處都是，我有一個習慣，就是每天都會分析一篇BBCnews，同時把自己覺著有用的辭彙記下來並且分類總結，並且強迫自己在寫的時候要聯想和使用，所以攻克6分方法總結起來就是主體段要有主旨句，即中心思想句; 同時論證一定要緊扣中心句，要善用邏輯詞，不要僅僅局限於連詞，定語從句和代詞 it 有時候也是很好的銜接方式。只有把這些點熟悉掌握了，考生才能突破六分瓶頸達到一個7分甚至更高的標準

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